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Reviewer: Daniisaur Signed 
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Date: Jan 11, 2011 09:51:17 am Title: Don't let them say you aint beautiful
[Report This]Date: Jan 11, 2011 09:51:17 am Title: Don't let them say you aint beautiful
I like his, even though I don't read Het much.
Just one little writing tip, when two people are talking, you put them one two different lines, an example:
"Do you know what a baby is?" She gave me a confused look. "A little person?" She guessed.
That should be:
"Do you know what a baby is?"
She gave me a confused look. "A little person?" She guessed.
Does that make sense?
Besides that, your writing is very good :D
May I suggest maybe getting a beta? They can help you with things like that.
Even though, like I said, I don't read Het, I am more then happy to help if you want it.